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[gnome-user-docs/gnome-3-0] g-h/net-*: tech reviews

commit 2b45a2c3a65fa86c6be10af8972ef96f894e13e3
Author: Shaun McCance <shaunm gnome org>
Date:   Mon Jun 6 12:18:11 2011 -0400

    g-h/net-*: tech reviews

 gnome-help/C/net-adhoc.page            |   11 ++++++++++-
 gnome-help/C/net-antivirus.page        |    2 +-
 gnome-help/C/net-editcon.page          |   17 ++++++++++++++---
 gnome-help/C/net-findip.page           |   11 ++++++++++-
 gnome-help/C/net-firewall-on-off.page  |    7 ++++++-
 gnome-help/C/net-firewall-ports.page   |    4 ++--
 gnome-help/C/net-fixed-ip-address.page |    8 +++++++-
 7 files changed, 50 insertions(+), 10 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-adhoc.page b/gnome-help/C/net-adhoc.page
index 68ae2d8..ae953cb 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-adhoc.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-adhoc.page
@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="net#wireless"/>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-05" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="incorrect"/>
 
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Phil Bull</name>
@@ -17,6 +17,15 @@
 
 <title>Connect directly to another computer with a wireless connection</title>
 
+<comment>
+  <cite>shaunm</cite>
+  <p>Instructions for accessing network settings wrong</p>
+  <p>Click your name on the to bar and select <gui>System Settings</gui>.</p>
+  <p>Click <gui>Network</gui>.</p>
+  <p>Or possibly: Click the network icon and select <gui>Network Settings</gui>.</p>
+  <p>Instructions inside network settings wrong too</p>
+</comment>
+
 <p>You can connect computers together by forming an <em>ad-hoc</em> wireless network. This is useful if one of the computers has a printer connected to it that you want to share, or if you want to transfer files between them, for example. With a normal (<em>infrastructure</em>) wireless network, you would connect both computers to a wireless network provided by wireless base station or router. If you don't have a base station, however, an ad-hoc network will still allow you to connect the computers to each other.</p>
 
 <p>To set-up an ad-hoc wireless network:</p>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-antivirus.page b/gnome-help/C/net-antivirus.page
index 3e4850d..5deea57 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-antivirus.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-antivirus.page
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@
     <desc>There are few Linux viruses, so you probably don't need anti-virus software.</desc>
     
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-05" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="correct"/>
     <credit type="author">
       <name>GNOME Documentation Project</name>
       <email>gnome-doc-list gnome org</email>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-editcon.page b/gnome-help/C/net-editcon.page
index 6613e00..326f7e2 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-editcon.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-editcon.page
@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="net"/>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-05" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="incomplete"/>
 
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Shaun McCance</name>
@@ -101,7 +101,14 @@ a wireless network connection. To edit a connection, select it in the
 </section>
 
 <section id="ipv4">
- <title>Available to all users / Connect automatically</title>
+ <title>IPv4 Settings</title>
+
+<comment>
+<cite>shaunm</cite>
+<p>There's also Shared to other computers</p>
+<p>Then there's addresses and dns servers and ipv4 addressing routes.</p>
+<p>All current info correct, but incomplete</p>
+</comment>
  
  <p>Use this tab to define information like the IP address of your computer and which DNS servers it should use. Change the <gui>Method</gui> to see different ways of getting/setting that information.</p>
  <p>The following methods are available:</p>
@@ -135,7 +142,11 @@ a wireless network connection. To edit a connection, select it in the
 </section>
 
 <section id="ipv6">
- <title>Available to all users / Connect automatically</title>
+ <title>IPv6 Settings</title>
+<comment>
+<cite>shaunm</cite>
+<p>The list of methods is a bit different</p>
+</comment>
  <p>This is similar to the <gui>IPv4</gui> tab except it deals with the newer IPv6 standard. Very modern networks use IPv6, but IPv4 is still more popular at the moment.</p>
 </section>
 
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-findip.page b/gnome-help/C/net-findip.page
index 2cdf881..4c5fb9e 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-findip.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-findip.page
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
     <link type="guide" xref="net"/>
     <link type="seealso" xref="net-what-is-ip-address"/>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-05" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="incorrect"/>
 
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Shaun McCance</name>
@@ -21,6 +21,15 @@
   </info>
 
   <title>Find your IP address</title>
+<comment>
+<cite>shaunm</cite>
+<p>Click your name on the top bar and select <gui>System Settings</gui>.</p>
+<p>Click <gui>Network</gui>.</p>
+<p>or maybe click the network icon and select <gui>Network Settings</gui></p>
+<p>Then you need to select your current connection. If you're wireless, you
+need to click, because wired is selected by default. Then the IP address is
+there in the info.</p>
+</comment>
 
   <p>Knowing your IP address can help you to troubleshoot problems with your internet connection. You may be surprised to learn that you have <em>two</em> IP addresses: an IP address for your computer on the internal network and an IP address for your computer on the internet.</p>
 
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-on-off.page b/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-on-off.page
index 0b3815c..875edb5 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-on-off.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-on-off.page
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
     <link type="guide" xref="web#connections"/>
     <desc>You can control what programs are accessible by the network.</desc>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-04" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="incomplete"/>
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Paul W. Frields</name>
       <email>stickster gmail com</email>
@@ -17,6 +17,11 @@
   </info>
 
   <title>Enabling and blocking firewall access</title>
+<comment>
+<cite>shaunm</cite>
+<p>Technical directions correct, but check language for consistency with
+how we tell people to access the overview.</p>
+</comment>
   <p>Your system may be equipped with a firewall that allows it to block programs from being accessible by other network users.</p>
   <p>Many GNOME programs are built to offer network services. For instance, you can share content, or let someone view your desktop remotely. Depending on how you installed GNOME, you may need to adjust the firewall to allow these services to work as intended. For instance, if your GNOME desktop was installed along with a larger software distribution, the firewall may also be pre-configured by the vendor.</p>
   <p>Each program that provides services uses a specific <em>network port</em>. To enable access to that program's services, you may need to allow access to its assigned port on the firewall. To allow access, follow these steps.</p>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-ports.page b/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-ports.page
index c852e9f..e6be461 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-ports.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-firewall-ports.page
@@ -1,12 +1,12 @@
 <page xmlns="http://projectmallard.org/1.0/";
-      type="topic" style="task"
+      type="topic" style="reference"
       id="net-firewall-ports">
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="net#security"/>
     <desc>Look at a list of programs that can be allowed through your system's firewall.</desc>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-04" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="correct"/>
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Paul W. Frields</name>
       <email>stickster gmail com</email>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/net-fixed-ip-address.page b/gnome-help/C/net-fixed-ip-address.page
index 60a96a1..3771446 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/net-fixed-ip-address.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/net-fixed-ip-address.page
@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="net#wired"/>
     <revision pkgversion="3.0" date="2011-04-04" status="final"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-04-06" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.0" version="3.0.1" date="2011-06-06" status="incomplete"/>
 
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Jim Campbell</name>
@@ -17,6 +17,12 @@
 
   <title>Create a connection with a fixed IP address</title>
 
+<comment>
+<cite>shaunm</cite>
+<p>Is step one needed? Can't do with wireless? Needs consistency check.
+Steps seem correct. Put them in steps element. Style.</p>
+</comment>
+
   <note><p>This article explains how to create a fixed (or static) IP address on your local network. Depending on the plan you have with your Internet service provider (or ISP), you may or may not have a fixed IP address on the internet. If you are not sure which type of connection you have from your service provider, contact your provider for more information.</p></note>
   <p>Here is how to create a fixed IP address on your network:</p>
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