[release-notes/gnome-3-16] refine things a bit

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 39f14f9b8782e85670a9fb24ce7ac98d285bd4f1
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 13 10:55:01 2015 +0000

    refine things a bit

 help/C/index.page |   21 ++++++++++++++-------
 help/C/more.page  |    2 +-
 2 files changed, 15 insertions(+), 8 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index caa6865..c1b1b30 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -26,18 +26,23 @@
 
   <title>Welcome to GNOME &gnomeversion;</title>
 
+  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest version of GNOME 3, and is the result of six months' work by the 
GNOME project. It includes a series of major new features, as well as a large number of smaller improvements 
and enhancements. The release includes &gitcommits; changes, made by approximately &gitauthors; contributors. 
New features and improvements being introduced in GNOME &gnomeversion; include:</p>
+
   <section id="notifications">
     <title>Notifications Reimagined</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME 3's notifications system has been overhauled for &gnomeversion;. A new message list provides 
straightforward access to previous notifications, and popup notification banners have been repositioned in 
order to make them more noticable and to prevent them from interfering with applications. As with the 
previous notifications design, actions can be taken on popup banners, including making chat replies.</p>
-    <p>The date and time drop down has also been redesigned for &gnomeversion;. Not only does it include 
previous notifications, but the new drop down also shows event reminders and world times. This gives a great 
overview of what is currently happening, as well as what is scheduled for the day. The addition of weather 
information and birthday reminders is planned for the future.</p>
+    <p>GNOME 3's notifications system has been overhauled for &gnomeversion;. The previous <gui>Message 
Tray</gui> has been replaced by a new message list that provides straightforward access to previous 
notifications, and popup notification banners have been repositioned in order to make them more noticable and 
to prevent them from interfering with applications.</p>
+    <p>As with the previous notifications design, common actions can be taken directly from notification 
popups, allowing you to quickly respond to events as they happen. This includes the ability to reply to chat 
messages.</p>
+
+    <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
+    <p>The calendar drop down, which is accessed from the time indicator in the top bar, has also been 
redesigned for &gnomeversion;. Not only does it now present the notifications history, but the new drop down 
also shows event reminders and world times. This gives a great overview of what is currently happening, as 
well as what is scheduled for the day. The addition of weather information and birthday reminders is planned 
for the future.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="files">
     <title>Files Improvements</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>The <app>Files</app> application has had a number of significant updates for &gnomeversion;. The grid 
and list views have been improved, so that they provide bigger thumbnails, easier to read rows, and have a 
more attractive appearance. They are complemented by a new popover for controlling the view, which makes it 
easy to change the zoom level and sort order from a single place.</p>
-    <p>File deletion has also been improved for &gnomeversion;, with the addition of a new, easy to discover 
undo feature. This allows files and folders to be moved to the trash using <key>Delete</key>, rather than the 
previous <keyseq><key>Ctrl</key><key>Delete</key></keyseq> keyboard combination.</p>
+    <p>File deletion has also been improved for &gnomeversion;, with the addition of a new, easy to discover 
undo feature. This allows files and folders to be moved to the trash using <key>Delete</key> alone, rather 
than the <keyseq><key>Ctrl</key><key>Delete</key></keyseq> keyboard combination.</p>
     <p>Finally, many of the menus in <app>Files</app> have been updated for consistency and logical 
organization.</p>
   </section>
 
@@ -56,16 +61,18 @@
   <section id="image-viewer">
     <title>Updated Image Viewer</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME's <app>Image Viewer</app> application has been redesigned for this release. The new design 
significantly reduces the amount of window chrome, to give more space to the images themselves. A new zoom 
control provides a quick way to conveniently zoom in and out, and the properties sidebar has been refined to 
provide a more elegant overview.</p>
+    <p>GNOME's <app>Image Viewer</app> application has been redesigned for this release. The new design 
significantly reduces the amount of window chrome, to give more space to the images themselves. A new zoom 
control provides a quick way to conveniently zoom in and out, and the properties sidebar has been refined to 
be easier to read and more attractive.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="new-apps">
     <title>New Preview Applications</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; introduces three new preview applications. These are initial versions that are 
intended for testing, and to give a taste of what is to come in future versions.</p>
-    <p>The new <app>Calendar</app> application provides an elegant and simple interface to your online 
schedule, and is integrated with <app>Online Accounts</app> for seamless setup.</p>
-    <p><app>Characters</app> is a new character map application. Common characters are quick and easy to 
browse, thanks to category-based browsing, which is accompanied by fully integrated search. A recent view 
lets you quickly find characters that you have used in the past.</p>
-    <p>Finally, <app>Books</app> is a new ebook viewer application for GNOME. The initial version allows 
viewing comic book archives; work on ePub support is ongoing.</p>
+    <list>
+      <item><p><app>Calendar</app> provides simple and easy to use window on to your online schedule, and is 
integrated with <app>Online Accounts</app> for seamless setup.</p></item>
+      <item><p><app>Characters</app> is a new character map application. Common characters are quick and 
easy to browse, thanks to category-based browsing. "Type to search" provides a quick and convenient way to 
find characters, and a recent view presents characters that you have used in the past, for ease of 
retrieval.</p></item>
+      <item><p><app>Books</app> is a new ebook viewer application for GNOME. The initial version allows 
viewing comic book archives; work on ePub support is ongoing.</p></item>
+    </list>
   </section>
 
   <section id="more">
diff --git a/help/C/more.page b/help/C/more.page
index bb43230..b3d3cae 100644
--- a/help/C/more.page
+++ b/help/C/more.page
@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#more" group="first"/>
-    <desc>Learn about the many other improvements in &gnomeversion;</desc>
+    <desc>Details of the other improvements in &gnomeversion;</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Allan Day</name>
       <email its:translate="no">allanday gnome org</email>