[release-notes/gnome-3-20] more.page - rewrite the maps section

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit c28bc407c32bb91f3f0433aaf01799c2d0c1a16c
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 11 16:45:03 2016 +0000

    more.page - rewrite the maps section

 help/C/more.page |   62 +++++++++++++++++++++++++----------------------------
 1 files changed, 29 insertions(+), 33 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/more.page b/help/C/more.page
index 95b7e03..e3b9e29 100644
--- a/help/C/more.page
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@@ -73,54 +73,50 @@
   <section id="mouse-and-touchpad">
     <title>Redesigned Mouse and Touchpad Settings</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>The mouse and touchpad interface has been overhauled to make a cleaner,
-    more stylish look. You can quickly locate the settings that are relevant to
-    you: for instance, the touchpad settings will only be displayed if you have
-    a touchpad.</p>
-    <p>More explanation for settings are also provided like natural scrolling
-    and primary button. Notably, the double-click delay setting can now be
-    found under the universal access menu instead of the mouse and touchpad
-    panel.</p>
+    <p>The mouse and touchpad interface has been overhauled, to give it a
+    cleaner more modern look. The new design makes it quicker to locate the
+    settings that are relevant to you: for instance, the touchpad settings will
+    only be displayed if you have a touchpad.</p>
+    <p>More explanation for settings is also provided, such as for the natural
+    scrolling and primary button settings.</p>
+    <p>As a part of these changes, the double-click delay setting been moved to
+    the universal access settings.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="maps">
     <title>Maps</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>The new version of Maps includes a collection of new features, as well
-    as smaller refinements.</p>
-    <list>
-      <item><p>Maps makes use of data provided by OpenStreetMap, which anyone
-      can contribute to. And with 3.20, it is now possible to add and edit
-      place information from Maps itself. Place popovers now include more
-      information, such as website addresses, phone numbers and whether
-      internet access is available. To show this information, they are now
-      expandable.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Custom layers can now be added using several file formats. This
-      can be used to add maps information from many sources, such as government
-      websites. You can also use it to display your own route data from mobile
-      devices or Google.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Directions were added to Maps for last release, version 3.18.
-      This has been expanded for 3.20, with the addition of printing for
-      directions can be printed. Print outs show map images along with
-      directions, for a clear set of route instructions.</p></item>
-      <item><p>With 3.20, it is now also possible to use Maps to generate map
-      images in PNG format. This can be useful for all kinds of application:
-      EXAMPLE, EXAMPLE, EXAMPLE.</p></item>
-    </list>
+    <p>The new version of Maps includes a number of significant new features.
+    With 3.20, it is now possible to add and edit place information (provided
+    by <link href="https://www.openstreetmap.org/";>OpenStreetMap</link>). In
+    addition, place popovers now include more information, such as website
+    addresses and phone numbers; this can be viewed by expanding each place
+    popover.</p>
+    <p>Custom layers is another new feature for 3.20. This allows additional
+    map layers to be added, using common mapping file formats like GeoJSON, KML
+    and GPX. These can be found online for things like local political borders,
+    points of interest for events, or environmental data. It is also possible
+    to use this feature to display your own route data from mobile devices or
+    Google.</p>
+    <p>3.20 also introduces printing for route directions. These directions
+    show map images along with directions, for a clear set of route
+    instructions. It is also possible to use Maps to generate map images in
+    PNG format. This can be useful for including in documents and websites, or
+    even for sharing location information with others.</p>
     <p>Other smaller improvements in this release include:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>The addition of a scale ruler to the map.</p></item>
+      <item><p>The new scale ruler that is shown on the map.</p></item>
       <item><p>Maps now shows the last viewed location when started, so you
       don't have to keep navigating back to the same place.</p></item>
       <item><p>Maps is now able to open location links that use the 'geo:'
       prefix.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Information about roundabout is now fully provided in directions.
-      </p></item>
+      <item><p>Information about roundabouts is now fully provided in
+      directions.</p></item>
     </list>
   </section>
 
   <section id="location-services-privacy">
-    <title>Location Services Privacy Controls</title>
+    <title>Privacy Controls for Location Services</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>You'll now get better control over which application have access
     to the location service data and not. The first time an application tries