[release-notes/gnome-3-30: 7/21] One more pass over index

[Link Dupont <link src gnome org>]

commit 20f3f2bfc084a7ea0569195ccd11d3bd00c9222e
Author: Link Dupont <link sub-pop net>
Date:   Wed Aug 8 07:18:07 2018 -0700

    One more pass over index

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   <section id="screen-sharing">
     <title>Screen Sharing</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>With GNOME 3.30, it is now possible to control screen sharing and remote desktop sessions through a 
newly added system menu. When screen sharing is enabled, an indicator to that effect is displayed in the 
panel. And with pipewire, this works both in Wayland and X11 sessions.</p>
+    <p>With GNOME &gnomeversion;, it is now possible to control screen sharing and remote desktop sessions 
through a newly added system menu. When screen sharing is enabled, an indicator to that effect is displayed 
in the panel. And with pipewire, this works both in Wayland and X11 sessions.</p>
   </section>
   
   <section id="software-update">
     <title>Update Automatically</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p><app>Software</app>, the GNOME software manager, now features automatic updating of installed 
Flatpaks. This makes keeping software up to date easier than ever.</p>
+    <p><app>Software</app>, the GNOME software manager, can now automatically update installed Flatpaks, 
making keeping software up to date easier than ever.</p>
   </section>
   
   <section id="thunderbolt">
     <title>Thunderbolt</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME 3.30 now supports for Thunderbolt. Newly connected Thunderbolt devices are automatically 
enrolled by the shell via the <em>boltd</em> daemon if the current user is a system administrator and the 
session is unlocked. Subsequent connections of the same device will automatically authorize the device. 
Settings also comes with a new Thunderbolt panel to manage existing device trust levels.</p>
+    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; introduces support for Thunderbolt. Newly connected Thunderbolt devices are 
automatically enrolled by the shell via the <em>boltd</em> daemon if the current user is a system 
administrator and the session is unlocked. Subsequent connections of the same device will automatically 
authorize the device. <app>Settings</app> also comes with a new Thunderbolt panel to manage existing device 
trust levels.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="web-reader">
@@ -59,13 +59,18 @@
   <section id="boxes-rdp">
     <title>Box Up Your Windows</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p><app>Boxes</app>, the GNOME virtual machine application, can now connect  to remote Windows servers 
using the Remote Desktop Protocol (RDP). Boxes also now has the ability to import OVA files, making sharing 
virtual machines even easier.</p>
+    <p><app>Boxes</app>, the GNOME virtual machine application, can now connect to remote Windows servers 
using the Remote Desktop Protocol (RDP). Boxes also now has the ability to import OVA files, making sharing 
virtual machines even easier.</p>
   </section>
   
   <section id="games-improvements">
     <title>Even More Games</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p><app>Games</app>, a retro gaming application, is even easier to use than before. The entire 
application can be navigated by gamepad. The keyboard can now be mapped to gamepad inputs, allowing custom 
keyboard shortcuts when playing the game. The Flatpak also ships with new emulator cores, making it possible 
to now play Game Gear, Master System, Nintendo DS, and Virtual Boy games.</p>
+    <p><app>Games</app>, the retro gaming application, is even easier to use than before. The entire 
application can be navigated by gamepad. Additional improvements include:</p>
+    <list>
+      <item><p>The keyboard can be mapped to gamepad inputs.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Additional details about each available game is displayed in the collection view.</p></item>
+      <item><p>The Flatpak bundles 4 more emulator cores.</p></item>
+    </list>
   </section>
 
   <section id="thats-not-all">